I got down at my station, Kalyan. Was seeing the station after three whole days, nights to be more precise. I just wanted to go home and hit the sack. I just wanted to clear my mind of all that had happened in that fateful last local. Oh Samira, how could anyone do such a thing to her.
I entered my society. It was 2:15 am in the morning and certainly not the time for most of my society members to be near the Volleyball ground. They were all huddled up near the tap where we wash ourselves after a good game of volleyball. They were apparently tying together logs of wood. On one side was an earthen pot filled with inverted incense sticks creating intense smoke. Pappu was disentangling the a long garland. Someone must have expired. What was happening?? I certainly was in no mood for another shock.
I asked Rajesh Uncle who had passed away. He just stared blank eyed at me, as if I weren’t there at all. The sadness in his eyes said it all. He didn’t need to say anything at all. I decided to leave him alone. Anyways, I would come to know of it at home.
I entered the lift, which was filled with people. By the time the lift was about reach my floor, I was hearing a lot of people crying. Damn, someone on my floor had expired. I was really concerned now. Had Mrinal’s Grandfather, finally succumbed to his blood cancer?? Or was it Deepak’s old Nani?? I couldn’t wait to get back home.
The lift finally reached my floor. The cacophony of cries had increased. I saw Deepak’s Nani sitting in her chair, sniffing (Thank God it wasn’t her, she was like my own Nani). But I noticed that most of the crowd had converged outside my door. I just ran as fast as I could. This couldn’t be happening. On the way I also happened to see Mrinal’s Grandfather. But I didn’t care.
I entered my house squeezing my way through the crowd. Nothing could have prepared me for what I was about to see. It was not only unbelievable but unimaginable!! Hell it just wasn’t possible! I was looking at a garlanded picture of myself and a body which was MINE!! Ma, Pa, Didi were crying uncontrollably. How on earth was it possible?! As if the incident in the train was not enough, this was another shock. This wasn’t for real. Im sure this was all a dream. Ma would wake me up any moment.
But Ma was just there beside my body, tears rolling down her face. This was no dream. I just wasnt understanding what was going on. I suddenly felt a blinding pain in my chest near my heart. When I touched it, I felt something warm. When I looked at my hands, they were red. My shirt was fast filling with what seemed like my own very blood. I opened the top button of my shirt. There was a gash near my heart. Blood was oozing out of it. Oh My God!
It all came back. The weird behavior of my colleague today at office, the reaction of Rajesh Uncle, the blood wound, the screams, the stab, the damn last local!! I just sat beside my body. Ma, Pa, Didi, I’m sorry. I couldn’t even touch them for one last time.
The headline on Page 2 of that day’s Mumbai Mirror on the newspaper rack read
“Brave Youth succumbs to wounds” By News Correspondent
The Samira Ahmed rape case took a tragic turn today with her saviour having succumbed to his wounds. The wound was very deep as the knife had penetrated the auricle. The chances of Nirvaan Mehta making it were very slim. Samira Ahmed was declared dead on admission itself. Today, two nights after that fateful train journey Nirvaan Mehta bid adieu to the world.
According to onlookers, Nirvaan was the only person who went ahead to save Samira from those rapists, even though they had choppers and knives with them. Nirvaan was said to have fought with those monsters, but he was outnumbered. Both Samira and Nirvaan were stabbed in the chest and in the back. The struggle didn’t last for long. The motive is being alleged as professional rivalry. Its sad what competition can cause one to do…
Hey Pakhi
aha seeing you after ages on Sulekha:D well great to hear that you liked the story. Well i just wanted 2 write a paranormal thriller, im glad you noticed the lil bit of other genre i have tried to introduce in the story. its good to know that the momentum was sustained:D
well you are tellin me tht ur gonna put somethin up "sometime soon" for a loong time now:P bring on the fiction:D n well ill try to keep the standards of my fiction up. but i guess ill do something light next time round:P
take care
ciao!
Gawddd...you seem to get better with every fiction of yours. That was simply S.U.P.E.R.B.
Some comedy , Romance ;) , Thrill , the Supernatural [ almost] and the strong social message in the end. Nice way to sell ideas in a world where no one has time for the clandestine mumbo -jumbo ....
I'm completely bowled over by the ending.
I must tell you that i read the blog ages back but landed @ home just a few days back hence the delay in posting the comment. I'll try to bring up my fiction sumtime soon [ if you can guess from the tone its not gonan be too soon :P ]
But now that you've invoked my hunger for your kinda fictions , better bring more of em :)
you know not to annoy a hungry tigress...wat say?
Yo PF
glad that i could sustain the momentum and maintain the twist good enough:D hehe:D yeaa wanted to make it spooky:D thanks for liking the story n reading all the installments patiently.
well yeaah i did conceptualize n write the story in one sitting, cus by nature i am lazy and i didnt want this idea to just remain a hallucination. later on i just made it more descriptive to build the "mahaul":D
take care
ciao
Hey Harsh
thrilled to know that the last installment lived upto the expectation. As for Darna series, well i loved the 1st installment very much. thanks for liking the story. well i dont know anything about technicalities behind the screenplay:D but now that u have mentioned it, ill look it up :D
take care
ciao
Hey Tanushri
thanks a lot for liking the story till the end. well rapes in trains keep happening, though oflate it has reduced, but its still reality n its scary,
take care
ciao
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Hey Pakhi
aha seeing you after ages on Sulekha:D well great to hear that you liked the story. Well i just wanted 2 write a paranormal thriller, im glad you noticed the lil bit of other genre i have tried to introduce in the story. its good to know that the momentum was sustained:D
well you are tellin me tht ur gonna put somethin up "sometime soon" for a loong time now:P bring on the fiction:D n well ill try to keep the standards of my fiction up. but i guess ill do something light next time round:P
take care
ciao!
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HI Nth writer
well glad that i could maintain the momentum and surprise you with the climax:d
take care
ciao
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Gawddd...you seem to get better with every fiction of yours. That was simply S.U.P.E.R.B.
Some comedy , Romance ;) , Thrill , the Supernatural [ almost] and the strong social message in the end. Nice way to sell ideas in a world where no one has time for the clandestine mumbo -jumbo ....
I'm completely bowled over by the ending.
I must tell you that i read the blog ages back but landed @ home just a few days back hence the delay in posting the comment. I'll try to bring up my fiction sumtime soon [ if you can guess from the tone its not gonan be too soon :P ]
But now that you've invoked my hunger for your kinda fictions , better bring more of em :)
you know not to annoy a hungry tigress...wat say?
Cheers!
Pakhi
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That left a chill in my heart!... Keep writing :)
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Yo PF
glad that i could sustain the momentum and maintain the twist good enough:D hehe:D yeaa wanted to make it spooky:D thanks for liking the story n reading all the installments patiently.
well yeaah i did conceptualize n write the story in one sitting, cus by nature i am lazy and i didnt want this idea to just remain a hallucination. later on i just made it more descriptive to build the "mahaul":D
take care
ciao
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Dude,

Neat twist in the tale
Sasura ekdum zor ka zhatka diyela hain tune!
Now things fall in place...the same set of clothes...missing office...the garrulous n mysterious gal...
....spooky wid a capital 'S'
Good show bro!
Waise, did you write the entire story at one go or part by part?
PF
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Hey Harsh
thrilled to know that the last installment lived upto the expectation. As for Darna series, well i loved the 1st installment very much. thanks for liking the story. well i dont know anything about technicalities behind the screenplay:D but now that u have mentioned it, ill look it up :D
take care
ciao
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Hey Tanushri
thanks a lot for liking the story till the end. well rapes in trains keep happening, though oflate it has reduced, but its still reality n its scary,
take care
ciao
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Phew ! That was terrific. What a turn ! What a twist ! what a way to realise...Good one Dude..retained the suspense..
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Thanks! Whew.. what an unexpected twist,,,
Can be an apt choice for Ramu - in case he wants to make his Darna.. series Part III
Keep up the good work! This also has all elements of a screenplay built in ...
~Harsh Puri
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